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OET Letter Writing – Step 2 Removing Irrelevant Information

Including what is relevant in a case notes is most crucial in writing a letter because each case notes comes with a lot of irrelevant information. You score high based on this skill. Look at the case notes below and say if the following pieces of information are relevant or irrelevant:

MOCK TEST 8 CHUCK HOOPER

Read the case notes and complete the writing task which follows:

Notes Mr Chuck Hooper is recovering after a time of paralysis and you are his nurse assisting him at home from Sphinx Rehabilitation Centre, Sydney.

Patient Details:

  • Name: Chuck Hooper
  • Age: 37 years
  • Wife: Marcy Hooper, 32 years
  • Children: No
  • Height: 6 ft Weight: 82 kg
  • University football player
  • Zonal Sales manager (Cleveland Chemicals)

Admission & Discharge

  • Admission date: January 25, 2021
  • Discharge: March, 01, 2021

Medical History

January 15, 2021
  • Car collision (while returning from a pet shop with their new dog – Doberman pinscher, “Duke”)
  • Subdural haemorrhage (motor section of the brain),
  • Complete L paralysis (the pet dog taken care of by a neighbour)
  • Speech fully impaired.
  • Double vision.
  • In critical list for a month
  • Company allows 1 year off.
February 28, 2021
  • In wheelchair – physiotherapy + bath + exercise + wheeled walker. Nil progress.
March, 01, 2021
  • Discharged
  • Emotionally low.
  • “Marcy was found crying.” (Report neighbors)
  • Left alone at home. Duke still in the neighbour’s kennel.
March 15
  • Duke brought home.
  • Chuck fell badly (Reports Marcy: “He wanted to be standing up to show Duke that he was alright. Duke was excited to see Chuck. Jumped upon Chuck.”)
April 03
  • Deteriorating health.
  • Nil progress
  • Socially and emotionally at the lowest. Holding to Duke’s belt and trying to talk to the dog.
April 09
  • Progress: 4 steps
April 11
  • Progress: 12 steps but fell badly
April 13
  • Progress: Walked ten meters
July 30
  • Physiotherapy with weights, pulleys and whirlpool baths.
  • Started receiving assistance from the Rehabilitation Centre.
August 4
  • Walked 200 to the local branch office of his company.
  • Worked for 2 hours.
  • Is determined to join the company full time from October.

Writing Task

You are Ms Emma Noa, Chuck Hooper’s care nurse at his home. Write a letter to Mr Kevin Sharma, Animal-assisted Therapy (AAT) Centre, Golden Circle, Sydney, requesting his involvement in the care of Chuck with the assistance of Duke. Include the medical and social background of the case.

In your answer:

  • Expand the relevant case notes
  • into complete sentences.
  • Do not use note form.
  • Use correct letter format.

The body of the letter should be approximately 200 words.

Wait! Before you start answering!

To decide what is NOT relevant, consider the following factors:

  1. Who is the patient? (Condition)
  2. What is the purpose?
  3. Who is the Recipient
    • What can this recipient provide?
    • What this res cannot provide?
  4. Treatment Status – If the patient’s diagnosis is done, you will not write any information in the case notes that will help the recipient to diagnosis.

Conciseness – What not to include

  1. Whatever the recipient already knows
  2. Whatever is not relevant…
  3. What the recipient can guess…
  4. Anything that is not related to the “discharge plan” and “Writing Task.”

Get Ready! Select the information that is not relevant.

  • Question of

    Notes

    • Mr Chuck Hooper
    • is recovering after a time of paralysis
    • and you are his nurse assisting him at home
    • from Sphinx Rehabilitation Centre, Sydney.
    • 100% Relevant
  • Question of

    Writing Task

    • You are Ms Emma Noa,
    • Chuck Hooper’s care nurse at his home.
    • Write a letter to Mr Kevin Sharma,
    • Animal-assisted Therapy Centre,
    • (AAT)
    • Golden Circle, Sydney,
    • requesting his involvement in the care of Chuck
    • with the assistance of Duke.
    • Include the medical background of the case.
    • Include the social background of the case.
    • 100% Relevant
  • Question of

    Patient Details

    • Name: Chuck Hooper
    • Age: 37 years
    • Wife: Marcy Hooper
    • Marcy’s age
    • No children
    • Height: 6 ft Weight: 82 kg
  • Question of

    Hobby and Profession

    • University football player
    • Zonal Sales manager (Cleveland Chemicals)
    • 100% Relevant
  • Question of

    Admission, Discharge

    • Admission date: January 25, 2021
    • Discharge: March, 01, 2021
    • 100% Relevant
  • Question of

    January 15, 2021

    • Car collision
    • (while returning from a pet shop with their new dog – Doberman pinscher, “Duke”)
    • Subdural haemorrhage
    • (motor section of the brain),
    • Complete L paralysis.
    • Speech fully impaired.
    • Double vision.
    • In critical list for a month
    • Company allows 1 year off.
    • Duke taken care of by a neighbour
    • 100% Relevant
  • Question of

    February 28, 2021

    • In wheelchair
    • Physiotherapy
    • Bath
    • Exercise
    • Wheeled walker
    • Nil progress
    • 100% relevant
  • Question of

    March, 01, 2021

    • Discharged
    • Emotionally low
    • “Marcy was found crying,” (Report neighbors)
    • Left alone at home
    • Duke still in the neighbour’s kennel
    • 100% relevant
  • Question of

    March 15

    • Duke brought home
    • Chuck fell badly
    • Reports Marcy: “He wanted to be standing up to show Duke that he was alright.”)
    • Duke was excited to see Chuck.
    • Jumped upon Chuck.”
    • 100% relevant
  • Question of

    April 03

    • Deteriorating health
    • Nil progress
    • Socially and emotionally at the lowest
    • Holding to Duke’s belt and trying to talk to the dog.
    • 100% relevant
  • Question of

    April 09, 11, 13, July 30

    • Progress: 4 steps
    • Progress: 12 steps but fell badly
    • Progress: Walked ten meters
    • Physiotherapy with weights, pulleys and whirlpool baths.
    • Started receiving assistance from the Rehabilitation Centre.
    • 100% relevant
  • Question of

    August 4

    • Walked 200 to the local branch office of his company.
    • Worked for 2 hours.
    • Is determined to join the company
    • full time
    • from October
    • 100% relevant

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